Saturday, October 14, 2017

Weather machine blessings



Wasn’t it
the rain that put shine
on the street
and made us
shiver closer together
locked step, arm in arm?  



Written for Marian's prompt at over at toads. She asked is write in the fussy little form of Shadorma, which is a six line not rhyming poem with the syllable structure of 3-5-3-3-7-5. 

14 comments:

  1. I love how you made the agent to pull you closer together. Reminds me of a time when a strong wind pulled me and my girlfriend closer together. There is nothing better than shared bodily heat.

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  2. The title reminds me of the Kate Bush song 'Cloudbusting', which had video with Donald Sutherland and a weather machine. I love
    'the rain that put shine
    on the street'
    and I love how you've described closen togetherness:
    'locked step, arm in arm'.
    A breath of fresh air, Izy!

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  3. The weather or something else entirely... I love the connectedness conveyed in this scene.

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  4. this evoks a memory for me

    the girl who would much later be my wife and I
    walking playful in the rain

    brings a smile

    namaste
    JzB

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  5. closer together
    locked step, arm in arm

    Can well be an ally to bring two lonely hearts together!

    Hank

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  6. A beautiful thought preserved in this shadorma poem! I love it!

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